The internal dialogue was very well done. I could actually understand how a supermarket would be creepy in the apocalypse, your description of rotting food smells did the trick.
Both Dom and Dewitt stayed in character, great work. I also found it a bit sad that he wouldn't ease her pain and tell her it's all okay, in regards to her past actions; But, in a way it's very fitting. You can't sugar coat such horrible acts.
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Date: 2010-03-20 05:55 am (UTC)The internal dialogue was very well done. I could actually understand how a supermarket would be creepy in the apocalypse, your description of rotting food smells did the trick.
Both Dom and Dewitt stayed in character, great work. I also found it a bit sad that he wouldn't ease her pain and tell her it's all okay, in regards to her past actions; But, in a way it's very fitting. You can't sugar coat such horrible acts.
Amazing work, Dollsome. Keep it up!!!!