I am just going to start with the obnoxiousness right out the gate because, YESSSSSSSSSSSS! This is the slow burn of ACTUAL CANON! This could play out on the show RIGHT NOW.
“You don’t see many of those anymore,” Abed remarks calmly from the corner of the room. “The handheld single hole ones, I mean. It’s usually the three hole punch now. For efficiency.”
Hahahahaha. Can I just say that, for as much as you've nailed seriously every single character here, what you've done with Abed is my FAVORITE? His line are just so perfectly inserted.
“I tripped,” Jeff does say, “and fell on her face.”
Hahaha! Oh, Jeff. I love how intentionally DENSE he is. What, kissing? No! That was gravity making his feet trip.
But then it’s not Starburns. (Who is clearly losing his edge.) It’s Annie.
I died on those lines. Oh man. And then Starburns SHOWS UP. HAHAHA!
The list was such a good idea--you always have these clever ways of making a fanfic more unique than just a regular ol' fanfic, you know? Like your conversations in parenthesis. And it's not just clever, you execute them so sharply!
“I can tell that’s code for ‘write “Jeff Winger is a fugly slut”’ inside the stalls,” Jeff says. “Ladies, I wasn’t born yesterday.”
HAHAHAHAHA. That is my favorite line, right there! I can just SEE Joel Mchale delivering it.
Thank you for writing so perfectly ALWAYS! Seriously, if fanfiction was printable art, I'd have a collection o' Dollsome masterpieces hanging in my hallway.
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Date: 2009-11-15 03:31 am (UTC)“You don’t see many of those anymore,” Abed remarks calmly from the corner of the room. “The handheld single hole ones, I mean. It’s usually the three hole punch now. For efficiency.”
Hahahahaha. Can I just say that, for as much as you've nailed seriously every single character here, what you've done with Abed is my FAVORITE? His line are just so perfectly inserted.
“I tripped,” Jeff does say, “and fell on her face.”
Hahaha! Oh, Jeff. I love how intentionally DENSE he is. What, kissing? No! That was gravity making his feet trip.
But then it’s not Starburns. (Who is clearly losing his edge.) It’s Annie.
I died on those lines. Oh man. And then Starburns SHOWS UP. HAHAHA!
The list was such a good idea--you always have these clever ways of making a fanfic more unique than just a regular ol' fanfic, you know? Like your conversations in parenthesis. And it's not just clever, you execute them so sharply!
“I can tell that’s code for ‘write “Jeff Winger is a fugly slut”’ inside the stalls,” Jeff says. “Ladies, I wasn’t born yesterday.”
HAHAHAHAHA. That is my favorite line, right there! I can just SEE Joel Mchale delivering it.
Thank you for writing so perfectly ALWAYS! Seriously, if fanfiction was printable art, I'd have a collection o' Dollsome masterpieces hanging in my hallway.