ext_104597 ([identity profile] sagacious-c.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] dollsome 2010-08-19 08:12 am (UTC)

You've perfectly captured the sadness of the triangle... No one is a villain, they're all caught in a sad situation. I like the ambiguity you create with Arthur being suspicious but not actually having any proof, leaving the possibility that his suspicions are part of the problem... But you also have such convincing details of his perception of Gwen's torn affections. Ah, SAD! Beautifully written.

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