I started out trying to remember my favourite lines, and got halfway through the gun fantasy paragraph and just...forgot. to breathe? to quote? either or both. anyway.
I love A good match, professionally speaking. Like she's catching herself, or maybe its sincere, but she can't acknowledge any implications 'cause she's just so controlled (and otherwise she has to admit how bad it hurts). It's like a little signal to your reader.
Also, the 'I went to England. It rained.''It tends to do that' exchange is so spot on tone wise for those awkward small talk conversations you make with someone you just met but know you're going to get along with, so the joke just happens. It's a very smooth exchange, despite the fact they're just getting to know each other there. I just love that.
The dreaming (?) bit was v. interesting, how you started out with really strong visuals and then went dialogue/physical touch and then ended with that really strong visual of her shirt and his eyes and the blood. Just an interesting structure.
I think its interesting too how even though officially he was Head of Security, the show clearly set him up as Aide de Camp, so it makes total sense they spent so much time together. That just occurred to me from your 'what's on the agenda bit.' Nice.
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I started out trying to remember my favourite lines, and got halfway through the gun fantasy paragraph and just...forgot. to breathe? to quote? either or both. anyway.
I love A good match, professionally speaking. Like she's catching herself, or maybe its sincere, but she can't acknowledge any implications 'cause she's just so controlled (and otherwise she has to admit how bad it hurts). It's like a little signal to your reader.
Also, the 'I went to England. It rained.''It tends to do that' exchange is so spot on tone wise for those awkward small talk conversations you make with someone you just met but know you're going to get along with, so the joke just happens. It's a very smooth exchange, despite the fact they're just getting to know each other there. I just love that.
The dreaming (?) bit was v. interesting, how you started out with really strong visuals and then went dialogue/physical touch and then ended with that really strong visual of her shirt and his eyes and the blood. Just an interesting structure.
I think its interesting too how even though officially he was Head of Security, the show clearly set him up as Aide de Camp, so it makes total sense they spent so much time together. That just occurred to me from your 'what's on the agenda bit.' Nice.
Go you with your 2:36 am fic!